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Ayame993: HIII I'm back with another one-shot~ ^_^
Sasuke: -sighs- Ignoring the other stories, Aya-chan...-.-
Ayame993: I know >.<
Ayame:: Are they discontinue?
Ayame993: NO TEME!! Now go and hump a pole... <.<
Ayame: How about you go and f*%k Sasuke -.-
Ayame993: You really want to bring this up?
Hinata: Ple-please not now... >///<
Naruto: Yeah, fight after the story is done D:
Kagome: Aya-sama does not own Naruto ^-^"
Ayame: Yeah cause if she did, she'll get canceled xD
Ayame993: YOUR DEAD!!!!


"Hinata!" Was the blood-curling screams of her crush. And after that, her world turn dark.

He Came and Visit

Hinata woke up in the hospital room. White walls and all was there was an open window. Her body refused to get up so she stay there, holding back tears of pain. Her pale lavender eyes were at the white ceiling. But now she sees her father looking and hovering over her.

"Your ok?" he asked and gotten a slight nod from his daughter. "That's great.. You were brave, Hinata. Your mother would be proud." Hinata smiled as tear build up in her eyes.

"And Naruto-kun?"

"He saved us..." Haishi helped her sit up. She smiled

"That's good..." she looked down.

"What's wrong? You should be happy. You were part of the saving of this village." he sat next to her, putting his hands in the sleeve of his kimono.

"I know, but..." she gulped down the words. "Now it's not the same with me and Naruto-kun..." Haishi looked confused for a bit and sighed

"If he does then it's fated that you two shouldn't be." he lectured, closing his eyes and nodding. It pain her to hear those words, but she pushed the pain in her heart and pushed up a giggled and a smile.

"You sound like Neji-nii." He open one eye, smiling.

"I'll go and inform your friends your ok." he said getting up and walked towards the door.

"Wait!"

"Hm?"

"Ho-how long have I've been ou-out?"

"Two weeks."

"Oh..." Haishi closed the door but open it again

"And every four hours Naruto been here and checked on you, for two weeks." he said with a smile and closed the door again. Hinata stared at the door, covering her mouth and holding back tears. She looked at herself at the mirror, that was placed behind the door, and saw bandages around her head, neck, and her arms and hands.

"He saw me in this shape!" she also saw a box and a few flowers on top of it in the mirror. She turn her head and there was the box, a box with  cinnamon rolls and flowers from Ino's family shop. She saw a card and held it.

'Get well soon, Hinata!' and all her friends, even Ko, sign it. That didn't make her blush though. At all the corners, there was a small drawn fox on them.

"Naruto-kun..." she held the card close and cried. Her heart went a mile a minute and her head reply all the times she was with him. Missions and hanging out at the ramen stand. Naruto Uzumaki. His smile saved her so many times. She love him, and yet no matter how hard she train, she wasn't any closer to him. Her eyes snapped open and looked up. There he was, without his jacket, and in a fishnet shirt. Holding another box of her favorite treat and flowers.

"Your awake!" He smiled and closed the door behind him. "Ho-hey, your crying..." he moved the  flowers to the side, place the box on top of the other box and whipped them away. Her face turn red. "Your red." he place a hand on her forehead and she blushed more. "Your sick?" he grinned, joking. Hinata just sat there tears streaming down. Naruto pulled her into a hug, and her face went more red.

"Nar-Naruto-kun!" she cried on his shoulder. Naruto smiled and rubbed her back slowly.

"Thank you..." he whisper into her ear.

"Fo-for?"

"Watching you and being on missions with you, you made me stronger, somehow. And if it wasn't for you," they pulled away and Naruto did his trademark grin, rubbing the back of his head. "My goose would be cooked." Hinata giggled , more tears falling. Naruto panicked "He-hey don't cry!"

"I'm happy and scared, Naruto-kun." she said, rubbing her eyes

"Why?"

"I'm happy I'm alive to see you again but scared because you'll stop being my friend... I am weird like you said..." Naruto laughed

"So is Sakura-chan. And I still lo-" he made himself stop talking, seeing Hinata's head down. "Look at me." she lift her head and he planted a kiss on her forehead. "Thank you, my Guardian Angel." she blushed and smiled

"S-so..." she play with her fingers.

"I'll make a deal with you." Naruto grin more.

"Hu-huh?"

"You take me out on a date, for a week, and the following week I take you on a date. On the last day, I'll tell you my feelings." he held out his hand "Deal?" Hinata looked at it and smiled

"Deal!" she giggled, shaking his hand. But Naruto pulled her into a gentle and soft kiss. She return it back, with a beat red face. And once they pulled away, she fainted. Old habits die hard. But to Naruto, it was cute.
Cover: :icondannex009:

This will be up on FanFiction.net so that's why it's started like that. I'll have my editor edit it. So you could say this is kinda a draft.
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:iconmichaeljcaboose007:
MichaelJCaboose007 Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2014
I swear to bloody god I always seem to end on your page!!

X...I'm looking for an X*see's x on the ground* that's a plus not an X
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:iconmushi-mush993:
mushi-mush993 Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2014  Student Digital Artist
o3o Is that a good thing? 

I'm so confuse!
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:iconmichaeljcaboose007:
MichaelJCaboose007 Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2014
Aye,it is
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:iconmushi-mush993:
mushi-mush993 Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Oh, yay!!
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:iconmichaeljcaboose007:
MichaelJCaboose007 Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2014
I enjoy reading your writing every much
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:iconmushi-mush993:
mushi-mush993 Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Aw, thank you!!
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:iconmichaeljcaboose007:
MichaelJCaboose007 Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014
You are welcome
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:iconnaruhinalover1855:
naruhinalover1855 Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2013
Too Late She Won 

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naruhinalover1855 Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013
I Feel The Youthful Energy In This Draft  Wahhh I CANT I LOVE IT I DONT KNOW WHY JUST DO :hype:  the fan girl took over 
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:iconmushi-mush993:
mushi-mush993 Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2013  Student Digital Artist
LET IT TAKE OVER!!
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BlackBrownPearl Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2012  Hobbyist
ohhhhhh that was cuuuuute ><
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:iconmushi-mush993:
mushi-mush993 Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Thanks :3
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Tori5 Featured By Owner May 15, 2012
One of the best NaruHina drafts I ever read! *gives a thumbs up*
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:iconmushi-mush993:
mushi-mush993 Featured By Owner May 15, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Wow, gee thanks ^-^"
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:icontori5:
Tori5 Featured By Owner May 15, 2012
You are welcome. :)
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:iconwaterangel5:
Waterangel5 Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
that is absolutely adorable!!
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:icongeropold:
Geropold Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2012
:3:heart: this is so...dunno...i love it :3
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psychocatdemon Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2012
wow. its a little to luvey dovey 4 my tastes but other than that this is a kick ass story mushi-san.write more and do the 2 weeks of dates in the story. cuz i voted 4 it.
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Mloun Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
He CENSORED! and visit ....
(just an old joke)

cute story btw ;)
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bocook1515 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2012  Student Photographer
Gorgeous.^_^
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TheAncients Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2012
interesting approach to the end. Makes me think he doesnt love her, knows he doesnt love her, and knows he may never. so is "testing the waters" to see if he does. most fanfiction its like "OMGILOVEYOUENVETHOUGHIONLYKNEWYOURFEELINGSFOR2SECONDS!"
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mushi-mush993 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2012  Student Digital Artist
lol! Yeah, I wanted people to seem like I left them wanting more. Some are telling me to do a story dealing with the two weeks. I'm still thinking. Stupid question, but do you like it?
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TheAncients Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2012
the idea of doing the two weeks? or the story already written?
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:iconmushi-mush993:
mushi-mush993 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Like making a story of their two week date
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TheAncients Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012
that would be interesting. do it 1 date at a time. and plz dont make them this perfect couple that is pure smiles and fun and neverget things wrong. i find those annoying and unrealistic. real couples DO argue ppl!
like arguing over the food choice. Ramen does not cover all 4 basic food groups! :P (u can use that as a quote if u want)
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:iconmushi-mush993:
mushi-mush993 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012  Student Digital Artist
xD I tend to make my couples be a real couples the best I can. But I'll use that idea. Thank you
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TobariMya Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2012  Student Artist
...
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:iconmushi-mush993:
mushi-mush993 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2012  Student Digital Artist
??
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:icontobarimya:
TobariMya Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2012  Student Artist
................Naruhina :(
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:iconmushi-mush993:
mushi-mush993 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2012  Student Digital Artist
You don't like?
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:icontobarimya:
TobariMya Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2012  Student Artist
.....................im sorry :(
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:iconmushi-mush993:
mushi-mush993 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2012  Student Digital Artist
I'm sorry for being rude, but why did you read then if you don't like the couple?
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:icontobarimya:
TobariMya Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2012  Student Artist
idk sorry i'll leave yall alone i dont wanna start any fight
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:iconmushi-mush993:
mushi-mush993 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2012  Student Digital Artist
I didn't mean it as a rude way! I'm just saying. I'm not trying to start anything.
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Tsushibi Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
OMFG THIS IS SOSOSOSOSOSOSOOSOSOSOSOOOOOO CUTEEEEE!!!!! :iconfrageplz:
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RAE8892 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
AWE!!
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BlueEyedMutt Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012  Student Digital Artist
OH MAI GAWD! :D Awesome :3
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subzero500 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Cute story heh[link]
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TeamShikaIno Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012  Hobbyist
Cute! Will you be posting the rest of it on DeviantART too?
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:iconmushi-mush993:
mushi-mush993 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012  Student Digital Artist
You mean the two weeks of them on their date?
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:iconteamshikaino:
TeamShikaIno Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012  Hobbyist
Yeah
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:iconmushi-mush993:
mushi-mush993 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2012  Student Digital Artist
I'll have to think about it
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:iconteamshikaino:
TeamShikaIno Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2012  Hobbyist
Okay :D
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sasuke12234 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012  Student Digital Artist
DAWWWWW :iconadorableplz:
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Rosetiger Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012
Adorable!
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uchihaitachi181 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012
there will be a link added to this to find it on FanFiction yes?
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:iconmushi-mush993:
mushi-mush993 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Yes. Once my editor edits it and I post the final and new version, I'll post it on FanFic and the link that goes with it.
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uchihaitachi181 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012
sweet, i await excitedly :)
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:iconmushi-mush993:
mushi-mush993 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012  Student Digital Artist
[link]

Here the link
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:iconuchihaitachi181:
uchihaitachi181 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012
arigatou, been looking forward to it ^_^
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